In the Blink of an Eye - Part 2: Dead in the Water: 5 Minute Freewrite: Monday: prompts: nautical language

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Day 773: 5 Minute Freewrite: Monday - Prompt: nautical language

Part 1: In the Blink of an Eye - Disoriented

Part 2: In the Blink of an Eye - Dead in the Water

"Hi Darnella. I miss you something fierce," Jarred said in a gruff voice.

"How am I? How are you? I was so worried when I couldn't reach you. I thought you said you'd call me the moment you docked," Darnella continued.

"I'm alright. Just banged up a bit with a busted leg. You won't believe what happened to me. The most bizarre accident. I hit this lady who was standing in the middle of the highway. At first, I thought she was three sheets to the wind. Now, I'm not sure. Someone either left her high and dry or she was caught between the Devil and the Deep Blue Sea. Not trying to be funny or anything," Jarred sighed, and was about to continue, but Darnella interrupted him.

"I have a massive headache, Jarret. Plain language, please. I'm in no mood to try to interpret today. I feel mom is slipping away, and I need to do somethig quick to resolve this case," she pleaded.

"Sorry. Forget sometimes I not talking to my mates. "I thought she was inebriated, and when I found out she wasn't, I figured if someone abaondoned her there or she was trying to escape from someone or something, then she's between a rock and hard place." Jarred said.

"Wait a minute, Jarred," as Darnella remembered something related to the case she was working on. Apparently, several other women were left wandering by themselves under suspicious circumstances and couldn't remember what happened to them. Her mind was swirling with possibilities that she might finally have found someone alive who could connect with her case involving her mom. Then she thought about the package left on her mom's porch.

She didn't want to alarm Jarred, so she asked, "Did she tell you or the authorities what happened to her?"

"Not a word, sad to say. Her name is Justine. I hope the authorities get to the bottom of it soon. I told them all I know. They asked me to stay in touch in case I remember anything else," he said.

"I wish you could be here," Jarred said, trying to take her mind off her mom. "But I understand the situation. How is she, by the way?"

"No change. Jarred, I've got to run. I may just have come across a break in my case. Need to contact my brother," Darnella said trying to hold back the excitement now rising in her voice.

"I thought your case was dead in the water, so when you told me about your mom's ordeal, I did some checking on my own while overseas. I think I may have found something. Will tell you later. Glad your brother is on board. Going to go check on Justine now. Love Much. Bye, Jarred said."

As he eased into Justine's dark room, Jarred took a quick look around, then decided to return later.


Justine tossed and turned most of the night, sleeping intermittently, with her hospital gown drenched, haunted by a shadowy dream of running as fast as she could, then water engulfing her.



Happy rest of the week everyone with whatever you are working on.

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I see that the mystery deepens @justclickindiva, it is a very exciting story you have going here, looking forward to the next part already, keep up your great work, it's awesome.

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Hi @thisisawesome. Thank you for your kind words and support of my post.

Did you see how I combined 2 stories. I was hoping someone would notice. My story from Darnella's part with her mom, Margaritte (The Package - The Smell Within). So I needed someone to confirm her story; hence, here comes a wondering woman in the middle of the highway that Darnella's boyfriend, Jarred, happen to hit. So I gave him a navy career for the "nautical language" freewrite day.

I hope I'm able to combine and weave the stories together for a suspenseful conclusion to both. I probably should have mentioned the other story. But, this is the first time I've attempted this.

Thanks @justclickindiva, and I missed that part, but I really like it, it's a series with it's own bibliograhy, kind of like all the books from Tolkien, keep up your awesome work.

You know the story is good when you start in the middle and then need to go find all the other parts -- tag me when you leave the next link to the next freewrite on @mariannewest's post!